This week’s song is a collaboration between Leigh-Ann, my eldest daughter, and myself.
I asked Leigh-Ann to created some music that we could hang a song on, so she came up with a chord sequence and rhythm that is the basis of song number 12. As a piano player she has come up with something that I probably wouldn’t have done on the guitar, which is great.
It’s a first draft that I think it needs another chorus, so this week I’m opening it up again to lyric suggestions for a second verse.
If you’d like to contribute to the process simply post your comments on the blog (click on the comment link below the video) or send me an email.
Even if you don’t have any lyric ideas please let me have your general feedback on the song.
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Andy Rogers Music 
As usual I am so happy you shared this song. Very nice and I like the here I am chorus the most. Really speaks to my heart about our honest and humble view before our God.
I dont have a second part for ya…sorry! Very nice though and it would be good to hear what your daughter played to inspire the song.
God bless,
Hadassah and Family in Guam
Song 12 (12 August 207)
Andy, perhaps vers 2 could read:
“Why do I try so hard to look inside myself
When all I need to see is You?
The tears I want to cry
The fears I can’t describe
Oh Lord I know there’s only you”
I will attempt to give a second verse. I have only written songs to God before.
Your love and truth oh Lord
has reached inside of me
your face is what I long to see
you have come and changed me
for all eternity
I love you so much more than life
Feeble but there you go, God bless and maybe it will give you a thought. I like the song but I feel like the chorus could have more as it is a catchy tune. I can’t stop humming it.
Hi Andy, again great song.
Here’s my feeble attempt at a second verse:
I need your special touch
With love that satisfies.
Your arms are open wide to me.
You bring me peace within
With strength to lead me on
And guide me through each day.
Well, something like that anyway!
I do enjoy these little moments of listening to you, and then getting the thinking cap on. It’s really another time to draw close to The Lord.
Thanks Andy.
Hi Andy – Wow. a great start. A good idea to get a melody away from your primary instrument – your daughter has done a good job! Very unusual chord progression, yet it works well.
Lyrics are fresh and no cliches that I can spot. I partucularly like ‘Your love is lifting me’ – very poetic and creates an awesome picture.
A pre-chorus with slightly different chords (like an extra odd chord thrown in), or just holding one chord or two for longer will help to provide a plesant break in the chordal pattern and break its monotony, as well as giving the song a bit of a lift into the chorus. – – PS> oops! I see you hold the G chord for longer between the verse and chorus 2 – it works!
Suggested v2-
It’s in Your joy I find
the strength I need right now
To see me through another day
I’m captivated by
Your loving kindness Lord
And so I lift my voice to say
And a possible vamp (or even as a substitute to the second verse) you could use this as a little lift. Imagine there is a gospel choir chanting this behind you:
Your love is lifting, Your love is lifting
Your love is lifting me
Yes, Your love is lifting, Your love is lifting
Your love is lifting me
Again – this is only my humble opinion – take and do what you want with it. Keep going Andy!
good for you (and your daughter) pressing on. the kernel that you already have is a pretty important thought.
What came into my head was something about . . . my problems don’t disappear but knowing You hold my hand through it, helps me through. Almighty God holding my empty hand. But I don’t have any brilliant rhyme, etc., for it . . .
Thanks again for sharing.